Hook sentence evaluation

[user11680]

Intro Paragraph Example 2

in this video in the I’m overwhelmed plan, i wrote this hook instead of the large hook in the video " Education is not just about acquiring knowledge, it’s a golden handcuff." and i thought about writing about improving the education system to make it freeing the mind and soul rather than being rigid and the shift to prompt sentence would be " The prompt argued that the purpose of the education is to free the soul and the mind which is true, But the methods we implement affects learning which frees the minds and souls." so is my thinking and writing right?

[Kweku]

@user11680

Education is not just about acquiring knowledge, it’s a golden handcuff

Good opener.

@user11680

The prompt argued that the purpose of the education is to free the soul and the mind which is true, But the methods we implement affects learning which frees the minds and souls." so is my thinking and writing right?

This is good if it comes after first acknowledging the prompt presents two view points.

Without doing that implies the prompt presents a single view point.

We must acknowledge both view points and then segue into our thesis just like Greg did.