Simplification of Long Passage

Can anyone give me a feedback on my simplification?

  1. D Griffith was a mastermind filmmaker
  2. D.G worked on innovative ideas like camera placement, editing and other elements to amplify films
  3. He also included diverse subjects in his films
  4. D.G grew ambitious, he also invented mutlti reel picture, which caught public attention

Looks pretty good. The last sentence of the final pgh is a better summary of the point of that pgh than the detail you mention.

You could also just make your summary “DG’s contributions to filmmaking” and leave it at that.

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Thanks @vince