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topic-Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams.
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Some people believe that more funding should be given to arts rather than olympic teams because it will help to maintain the archaic aesthetic arts and it’s corresponding cultural values in the new generation. However, in my opinion, government should invest more money to support athletics for the following two reasons.
First of all, money is needed to support athletics who can not afford to get high quality training. There are many adolescents who belongs to lower socioeconomic groups wants to follow their passion of becoming athletics. For example, In India Neeraj Chopra’s gold medal at tokyo olympics has sparked a sudden interest in athletics as many young boys and girls wants to take up the sports and emulate their inspiration. If government will fund to encourage such young talents by providing sufficient practice places with quality equipment then it would bring more gold medals in the country. Consequently, nation will be highlighted all over the media at the same time people from other countries start to admire that gold medalist and somehow equate his or her achievement to the achievement of the his or her nation.
Secondly, financial help to sports would help to incite healthy lifestyle among gen z. It is imperative to focus on health because sedentary lifestyle has spoiled the future generation of the nation. Childrens usually veg out in front of TV or video games which eventually promote obesity. Let’s consider the aforementioned example of Neeraj Chopra, Growing up at Khandra village, near Panipet, he was an overweight and restless kid most of the time. Since his parents wanted to keep him occupied, his dad, a farmer, took him to the Shivaji stadium. He had tried other sports too. He was not too fond of running, but when he saw a few heavy men throwing the javelin, he wanted to try it too. When he realized that he was good at it, he started loving it more and started following healthy diet. This clearly illustrate that by creating more play grounds like Shivaji stadium would not only make younger children healthy but also can give birth to champions. Whereas, arts can not help to promote healthy lifestyle because it does not require intense physical activity.
In conclusion, investing more money to support games or olympic by making best infrastructure would help to achieve dreams of people in lower income percentile and would make the nation worldwide famous by bringing more gold medals. funding in sports by making play grounds would encourage gen Z to stay fit.